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402373 No.2532  

200 pages, public raw

http://www.mediafire.com/?fv1o5vu4bb3ngfg

Would REALLY love to edit this if someone translates, even if it's just the shoddy Q75 jpegs here (although better raws would be a plus obviously)

>> No.2533  

>>2532

I'll scan this book, don't worry.

>> No.2699  
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Here is the first chapter's translation. I skipped most SFX and after page 17 didn't write any down either. If you want me to look at anything let me know.

>> No.2705  

>>2699
Wonderful, thanks! And I'm not keen on doing SFX in something by Asagi anyway so that works for me.

>> No.2706  

>>2699

Grand! You can expect scans sometime early next week~

>> No.2714  

>>2706
Take your time, I still have over 100 pages of more important things ahead of me.

>> No.2754  

>>2706

http://www.mediafire.com/download/2vqbwabehascf38/RAW_Ch01_Otome_Saku_%5BAsagi_Ryuu%5D.zip

Sunday is aparently "Early in the week."

>> No.2755  

>>2754
It's early Monday now, so that works. Thanks!

>> No.2842  

I'll take a look at the SFX again over the next 5 days and maybe add a few more when they actually add something. They are absolutely trivial but also pretty pointless for the most part.

  • Could you translate the chapter title on pg 4?
  • On pg 16, くしゅっ - is that a sneeze? Or just the usual?
>> No.2843  

http://www.mediafire.com/?4qmb912c8ll58uf

>> No.2844  

>>2843

Great job!

I have more work for you. (Yaaay?) I scanned the cover and the color extra:

http://www.mediafire.com/download/yadp3kxgiykcr9e/RAW_Otome_Saku_Colors.zip

>> No.2845  

>>2844
Oh right, wanted to ask you for those and totally forgot. Yay, thanks!

>> No.2846  

>>2842
p4
乙女たちは天上の庭に咲く - Heavenly Garden Where the Maidens Bloom
第1話 聖処女 - Chapter 1 Holy Virgin

p16
くしゅっ - It's the sound of moving wet clothes. So 'Sopping wet' or something.

The bubbled SFX
p10
second to last panel: Slosh/Slosh Slllrp Slosh/Slosh
last panel: Grope

p11
Rub Rub

p18
Kyaa Smooch Sllrp Slosh

p21
Rub Slick/Slick Spurt Rub Rub

p22
panel 1: Slick
panel 2: Grab
panel 3: Spurt
panel 5: Slick Rub Slick

p23
Spurt
Spread

>> No.2867  

>>2843

My only complaint (apart from not liking the story) is that I think that:

Page 15:

I think "Senpai... I think[Enter]I'm going crazy..." might look better like:

"Senpai...[Enter]I think I'm going[Enter]crazy..."

That text can also be moved up a bit, and a little, little to the left.

>> No.2873  
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57638

>>2867
Oh, I love the story. This is the first in a long time where I can actually buy the chemistry between the characters instead of the "oh by the way, I love you, now lets have sex right here" phoney tripe it usually is. And it does get sweeter eventually. Still, I like the setup. Two maidens, dragged into the maelstrom of desire by without really understanding this powerful attraction and yet unable to stop... hah... haah...

Ahem. Anyway: http://yuriproject.net/heavenly-garden-where-the-maidens-bloom-ch01/

You may want to remove the full cover for the reader, I don't think a 4.5 MB 4600x2000 image is nice to load there.

>> No.2874  

>>2873

Oh, I'd much, much, much rather have the crappy "oh we just got together, sex sex sex sex" story than these rather creepy "horny girl forces herself on someone who turns out not to hate it after all, just because porn" kind of stories. shudders

A great job can be found by following this link: http://dynasty-scans.com/chapters/heavenly_garden_where_the_maidens_bloom_ch01

I decided to go with the full cover in the upload. It doesn't really break the flow of the story, and if it's taking too long for you, you can always just go to the next page~

>> No.2875  

>>2874

>horny girl forces herself on someone who turns out not to hate it after all

I don't think it's that simple. Sara is pretty screwed up herself so I took Itsuki's act more as a warning. She didn't get turned on until Miharu reacted the way she did if you look at the blushing and facial expressions. It went out of control, for both of them.

>> No.2885  
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Chapter 2. Feel free to skip certain SFX because I didn't look them all up anyway.

>> No.2886  

>>2885
Sara called her Sensei's pee housui which is the name of a fragrant sake (lit: fragrant water). But maybe just calling it fragrant water/beverage is better. I put sake twice for what Sara is drinking this chapter but it's 4% so that should really be beer just like the last chapter.

>> No.2887  

>>2885

\o/

I wont be home untill tuesday, so don't expect scans untill... wednesday?

>> No.2888  

>>2887
That's fine, thanks, I'll have to deal with my Strike Witches backlog first anyway.

>> No.2911  

>>2888

Raws: http://www.mediafire.com/download/ey1ymasb9m6ddaq/

Have I complained about the high quality paper being tough to debind? It is. Which... is a good thing, I suppose.

>> No.2914  

>>2911

Moar raws! http://www.mediafire.com/download/x1ik74k937f771c/

Seems like Asagi is releasing another 18+ tank next month. \o/ for porn.

http://shop.melonbooks.co.jp/shop/detail/211000029927

>> No.2915  

>>2914
Probably going to be het from what I've read, so meh.

>> No.2916  

>>2914
Judging by what this artist had done in current year in adult magazines it will be het about older women and younger boys theme.

The work I'm more interested about is this one, which seems to be sfw manga about older woman and younger girl relationship.
http://shop.melonbooks.co.jp/shop/detail/211000029279

>> No.2917  

>>2916

>it will be het about older women and younger boys theme.

http://www.mangaupdates.com/series.html?id=86986.

>> No.2918  

>>2917
That's not the 18+ tank in question. 15-sai is a general manga serialized in Comic High.

>> No.2928  

http://www.mediafire.com/?uk6mwotrca980eo

  • pg 46, Second to last bubble is in the thought font, which I ignored. Otherwise the next one wouldn't make sense, unless sensei is a telepath.
  • Left sake in for now, probably going to change it for what Sara is drinking (I'd think both Miharu and Itsuki would have a stronger reaction to hard liquor straight from a can) but maybe leave it in for the euphemism.
>> No.2939  

>>2928

Great job! Have some QC!

>Sake thing.

I'd put it as "beer" or "cider" or something. Doesn't the word "sake" just mean "alchoholic beverage" in japanese?

Page 32:

"But the questions are tough." Could you look if "questions/are tough." would work better? As it is now it feels a bit too tight for me.

"Ah... Um... Shiori-sensei..." can be moved up and to the right.

Page 33:

Perhaps the "A loving kiss." would look better with a linebreak or two? I actually think the "A" is big enough to stand alone: "A/loving/kiss."

Page 34:

I think the "Her braids..." can be moved a bit upwards, and maybe a px or two to the right?

Page 35:

"At the night, in the church..." can be moved up and to the right.

Page 39:

I would think that "I... must abstain from..." can be reshaped. Might look better like "I... must/abstain from/ any illicit/love affair." Or something? Text also kinda feels to small for me, and a bit too far up in the bubble. With a bit of reshaping I think you totally can fit a bigger fontsize.

Page 41:

"Sensei, where have you..." a px to the right, and two up, maybe?

Page 48:

"It's... coming..." linebreak?

Page 50:

"Whenever time persists, I want to our hearts to communicate." This is one too many "to"s. Make it "...I want our hearts to communicate." (Or maybe even "I want for our hearts to communicate." if you want to be all fancy.)

"When spring came..." would perhaps look better like "When/spring came,/Sensei left/to study/abroad." to give a bit of space between bubble and text.

Page 54:

"It must have been a..." can perhaps be moved a bit to the right?

"That's why I left this school..." would perhaps look a little better like "That's why/I left this school,/and then/reentered." ?

And that's it for this QC round~

>>2916

Meh. Oh well.

>> No.2950  

I scanned the rest of this book \o/ All raws are found here:

http://www.mediafire.com/folder/rzw87todqra12/Otome_Saku

>> No.2952  

>>2950
You have my undying love.

>> No.2970  

>>2952

Undying love GET!

>> No.3002  

Gotta love those pocket dimension wigs.

http://yuriproject.net/heavenly-garden-where-the-maidens-bloom-ch02/

>> No.3003  

>>3002

Hmm.

>She wears a wig to go unrecognized due to former scandal.
>Flashback shows her in wig.

...hiding in plain sight?

http://dynasty-scans.com/chapters/heavenly_garden_where_the_maidens_bloom_ch02

>> No.3034  
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Chapter 3 translation.

>> No.3129  

http://www.mediafire.com/?n2n3r3uoc4rujg3

>> No.3153  
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>> No.3166  

>>3129

Imma ninja this post! Great job.

http://yuriproject.net/heavenly-garden-where-the-maidens-bloom-ch03/

http://dynasty-scans.com/chapters/heavenly_garden_where_the_maidens_bloom_ch03

>> No.3172  

In chapter 3 page 61, Nonaka on the door sign should be Nakano (中野).

>> No.3174  

>>3172
Fixed.

>> No.3297  
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Here's chapter 4.

>> No.3303  

Thanks, that one was adorable

http://www.mediafire.com/download/wowdhtwj809owjj

>> No.3304  

Note to self: blush on pg 80 too small, sfx on 86 not properly typeset

>> No.3310  

>>3304
pg76

"fine. I won't involve myself with her again.">> move to the bottom a bit.

pg77

"m-me too...">> move a pixel or two to the right..

"thud">>>sfx make is smaller or move it to a 45 degree angle so that it
doesn't disturb the Masuda shop text...or make the masuda shop text less in opacity so
the "thud" does not interfere with it.

pg84.

sfx in the first panel is not edited just add a white stroke on it to get rid of it if you have
the translation it will go with the rest...^^;

ok the rest seems great...if I find anything else Ill let you know but that's really great editing for so
many pages.

>> No.3311  

page 079
I'll leave here, then. =>
I'll be going, then.

Senpai, hold on a second, okay? =>
Senpai, wait here a second, okay?

page 080
So now I've sunk to sneaking into her room... =>
So now I'm even in her room...

page 081
Senpai, I brought you a lunch box. =>
Senpai, I brought us some lunch boxes.

>> No.3317  

>>3310

>"thud">>>sfx make is smaller or move it to a 45 degree angle so that it doesn't disturb the Masuda shop text..

Covering it up was the point, same as in the raw. The text is clearly visible on the previous page anyway.

>> No.3319  

>>3317 your right on that!

great job everyone! for so many pages your a great editor,Phyis...And Procyon your translation is always spot on ^^;

>> No.3347  
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Translation of chapter 5.

>> No.3349  

http://www.mediafire.com/download/ntgiz4gx5a0i8ct

pg 114 is still missing most of the bubbled sfx, that was the last page I worked on and I got fed up with those. Will add them later. It's complete otherwise.

>> No.3352  
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Translation of chapter 6.

>> No.3353  

>>3349

Page 97:

"We can't, here." -> "We can't do this here."

Page 98:

"Futaba." can be moved upwards.

Page 99:

"Ah-mm." little up, two to the right.

"Kanna-chan?" two px to the right.

Page 101:

"Supervisor..." little left, little down.

Page 105:

"I'm not letting you escape." add a line break somewhere~

Page 106:

"I like anal masturbation." can be moved a bit up.

Page 114:

"H-Hard to breathe..." can be moved a bit up, and a px to the right?

And that's what I can find at the moment.

>> No.3358  

http://www.mediafire.com/download/8r3m1cewqd9pdc6

And done, just 60 pages left. Some of the best art in the book.

>> No.3361  

>>3358 I'll give it a check overnight and have QC tommorow :)

>> No.3364  

>>3358
QC notes

pg 121. It has nothing to do with you>>move a pixel to the right a pixel or two down.
pg. 122 "girls my age don't like">>>move a pixel or two to the left.

all I was able to find everything looks really good ^^;

>> No.3645  
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Chapter 7 (finally)

>> No.3655  
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Chapter 7.5

>> No.3658  
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Chapter 8 (last chapter)

>> No.3659  

http://www.mediafire.com/download/0cqye225prsgzmt

>> No.3661  

http://www.mediafire.com/download/qgj18jdp1dg80jl

>> No.3662  

>>3659

Awesome job :D

Page 150:

"like creatures themselves, crawled over all over and into of N-ko's body." there are a few too many words here:

"like creatures themselves, crawling all over and into N-ko's body"

And that's pretty much what I found.

>> No.3666  

http://www.mediafire.com/download/q2o5sy743v49219

And that's all. Minor changes:

pg 176

>Fu fu... You and Senpai have the room alone, I'll be out tonight.

-> the room to yourselves,

pg 187

>Miharu-san...

->Miharu-sa—...
'Cause it's cut off in the raw as well and Itsuki uses -sama consistently at this point already.

Don't quite get the exchange between the girls on 179/180. Also not what Cameo Onee-sama's deal is, but that one is probably deliberate.

>> No.3667  

>>3659 Chapter 7
Page 146
But... =>
But—...
(second) It's fine.
No, it's fine.

The uniform was always to be kept clean, =>
School rules said the uniform should be kept clean,

and so the uniform was to be become even dirtier. =>
and so the dirtier it became the better.

Page 148
I did it, and the windows, too. =>
I locked it, and the windows, too.

Page 151
who got turned into that as punishment. =>
who got turned into those as punishment.

Page 153
We did it so much yet I'm ... =>
We did it so much, yet I'm ...

Page 155
I was really serious about you, too, =>
I'm really serious about you, too,

>>3661 Chapter 7.5
Page 165
on the outskirts of the town. =>
on the outskirts of town.

>>3666 Chapter 8
Page 177
Ah, um, Sara-chan told me to give you this. =>
Ah, um, Sara-chan had these.

Page 179
That girl is... =>
She wants to goad them?

Um, from that one day... =>
Um, I have these from the play...

The last act... =>
Of the last act...

Page 180
Hey, I didn't mean... =>
I— i— it's not like we wanted—

Well, well. =>
Now, now!

Page 182
No, /you/ were mistaken, Senpai! =>
Don't play confident when you were wrong, Senpai!

Page 185
Suddenly, tears started welling up. =>
Suddenly, tears started welling up in my eyes.

Page 187
frame 3, important SFX: こぽっ -> Stream

>> No.3710  

will be doing qc on this one

>> No.3711  

>>3710
What? This has been released 2 months ago.

>> No.3712  

>>3711 Barely notice that X/ will do qc then for more projects.



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