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File: 百合総集編~甘いニセモノ~_0059.png -(3903663 B, 2171x3028) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
3903663 No.2305  

This post will be just as confused as the previous one. These are the raws for the rest of the collection, featuring the remaining three books (and I was wrong in the last post, the last thread contains two books. I am too tired to be doing this right now.) Just extract it all to the same folder, and have less confusion.

Part 03: http://www.mediafire.com/?j64l1n3irc5hidr
Part 04: http://www.mediafire.com/?n5j6zdzldi5o39g
Cover: http://www.mediafire.com/?b28vta76d70xgww

>> No.2306  

The second story in part 3, beginning from 82.png, is scanlated: http://dynasty-scans.com/chapters/amai_himitsu

>> No.2307  

>>2306
81.png

>> No.2310  

>>2306

Oh, had forgot all about that one. But that's really nice.

>> No.3935  

Hi guys, starting up as a new translator. I recently signed on with Lazy Lily to help out with their Sakura Trick scanlations and thought I'd start contributing here as well.

For the moment, I've taken a look through http://status.yuriproject.net/needs-tl.php and marked down most of the existing projects I might be interested in. (If that list isn't the most comprehensive way to keep track of projects here which might be in need of translation, please let me know.) To start off with, I thought I'd finish off this compilation, beginning with the latter series which has already had one part scanlated.

I intend to post the translation shortly (perhaps in a few days, or less), but first I thought I should make a post introducing myself and potentially confirming editor interest. That's about it for this post.

Cheers ;).

>> No.3940  
File: [Yuririn] Yuri Compilation ~Amai Nisemono~ Amai Series part.txt -(0 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

'k, so here's the script. First I should note that this compilation is basically split into two parts: the 'Nisemono no Koi' + 'Sore kara' stories, which have been posted as Parts 01 and 02; and the 'Amai' series, here.

The last two pages in >>2302 are actually the introduction page and author's message about this latter half, the 'Amai' series, so I've translated that first. I'll post the individual pages from that archive here as well.

>> No.3942  
File: [Yuririn] Amai Yuuutsu (Sweet Melancholy).txt -(10741 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

>>3940
Er, or not, seems like the board is complaining the images are too large.

Anyway, aside from that, attached here is the translation for the first part of this series, pages 57-80 of Part 03.

>> No.3944  
File: [Yuririn] Yuri Compilation ~Amai Nisemono~ Amai Series intro.txt -(1743 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

>>3940
Revised intro.

>> No.3976  

I'll take this and the rest of the compilation.

>> No.3992  

http://uqc.me/iofom

The translation is very literal and quite a few phrases sound unnatural, so this really needs proofreading by someone who isn't me.

>> No.3997  

>>3994
I can't find the RAW for the intro

>> No.3998  

P55
Sweet Melancholy

Sweet Secret

Sweet Heart

(In case you want to edit it in)

P56
(I can't find the raws to this, so I can't check the translation)

P57
And yet those cute things, do not suit me at all. =>
Those cute things, do not suit me at all.
(There is a repetition of 'And yet' in the prev panel)

ーWhy, with this kind of figure, =>
ーWhy was I born with this kind of figure,

Was I born, I wonder. =>
I wonder.

P58
--Yes, for example =>
ーLike that girl over there,
ーfor example...

Fluffy hair, tiny stature, and a cute voice- =>
That Fluffy hair, tiny stature, and a cute voice-

I wanted to be born with this kind of feeling--... =>
I wanted to be born with these characteristics--...

...i, Nagisa-senpai! =>
ーUmm,
Nagisa-senpai!

Eh? Ah, me?? =>
Eh?
Err, me??
(Optional. I'm probably too anal lol)

P60
Sparkling dazzlingly,
The ideal girl like whom I wanted to be-
Towards me!?
=>
A sparkly dazzlingly ideal girl
like whom I wanted to be-
Confessed to me!?

(I will take a break now
How do I quote people? Like:
>>4567
Also, how do I call out the green coloured quotes?)

>> No.4001  

>>3998

> >>4567

You are doing it right, you just have to use a post number that actually exists for it to get linkes. Alternatively, just click on the post number and it'll be inserted.

>Also, how do I call out the green coloured quotes?

As in, make them? Just put an angle bracket before what you want to mark as quote.

>I can't find the raws to this

They are the last 2 files in the part 2 archive at >>2302

>> No.4013  
File: Sweet Melancholy.txt -(6730 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

I did an overhaul.

>> No.4014  

>>4001
Thanks Phyis!
Also, I am terrifically sorry if there are tons of edits... I made a few things optional so exclude them if you wish.

>> No.4015  

>>3992
>>3998
>>4014
Page 57

>ーWhy, with this kind of figure, / Was I born, I wonder. =>
>ーWhy was I born with this kind of figure, / I wonder.

What irony to be born, / with this kind of figure.

>And yet those cute things, do not suit me at all. =>
>Those cute things, do not suit me at all.
>(There is a repetition of 'And yet' in the prev panel)

I think repetition there is all right. It also makes it more clear where the next sentence is, being on the left.

Page 58
Yes, that's right! =>
Yes!

Page 60

>Sparkling dazzlingly,
>The ideal girl like whom I wanted to be-
>Towards me!?
>=>
>A sparkly dazzlingly ideal girl
>like whom I wanted to be-
>Confessed to me!?

A sparkling and dazzling girl, (or: A sparklingly dazzling girl)
exactly the type I want to be,
confessed to me!?

Though I'm happy, ...'cause we're both girls and stuff... =>
I'm happy, really, but we're both girl, and...

...above anything else, because I think, probably, =>
...I actually kind of doubt...

I'm not the type of person you think I am...y'know? =>
I'm really the type of person you think I am... y'know?

(Ah...) (Will she cry, I wonder...) =>
Ah, I didn't just make her cry, did I?

I-!! =>
I like—!

Like =>
/everything/

about Nagisa-senpai-! =>
about you, Nagisa-senpai!

Please, don't say that sort of thing...! =>
So, please don't say that sort of thing...!

Page 61
What is it, this murderous objection- =>
That confession nearly gave me a heart attack.

--And so, you're going out with her, that girl. =>
--And now you're going out with that girl?

(Hu-h.) =>
Hmm...?

G... We're not going out! We're friends! =>
W—... We're not going out! We're friends!

so much of a girl inside. =>
such an pure maiden inside.

Well, do your best, in various ways. =>
Well, best of luck. You'll need it.

...Most likely, =>
...Yes, certainly...
...Yes, I think, definitely, =>
Most likely,

Page 62
It's not like I actually have to do it anyway.. => (2 dots)
It's not like I actually have to do that...

...Uu. B, Blinding...- =>
...Uu. D— Dazzling... (like p60)

Page 63
s ぺこり (bob) -> bow
s んちょ。 (slightly.) -> Hah. (She says it as she bows.)

...That was... a cuteness =>
...She was... on a cuteness

Geez, she's somehow, really- =>
Geez, she is like...

My ideal girl--... =>
The ideal girl...

missing text: 乙女モード - Pure maiden mode.

Ah... Did I surprise you...? =>
Ah... Did I gross you out...?

If you're gonna get involved, make sure to properly prepare your resolve, alright? =>
If you're gonna take it farther, be prepared to deal with what comes with it, alright?

Er, that... what do you mea... =>
What exactly... do you mean...?

Sorry but, I don't have the inclination to guide you that far. =>
Sorry but, I'm not gonna guide you that far.

Then, see ya- =>
See ya.

(will continue later)

>> No.4016  

>>4015 See >>4013
Uhh... Awkward... I leave it all to you then...
At least I can compare and learn how you actually QC stuff =O

>> No.4018  

>>4016
You have many good suggestions so keep it up (more eyes is better). When I do P64+ I'll edit the document here >>4013.

>> No.4031  

>>4013
I've included all of these in quotes, because I have comments for a few. If I didn't write anything it's good.

Page 64
...'Resolve'...? =>
...'What comes with it'...?

(Itadakima-su) =>
Digging in ♡

(Just to my tastes...-) =>
Just how I like it...

>P65
>S, sorry... I stared at you... =>
>S- sorry for staring at you like that...

S- sorry for staring at you...

>P..., Please don't mind that~ Momoko-chan too, eat, here. =>
>Erm... You don't need to apologise for that~ You should start eating too, Momoka-chan.
>What to do...... =>
>What should I do...
>P66

I sure want to be that girl's prince... =>
I do want to be that girl's prince...

>Be that as it may... It would be considerably overdoing it, however... =>
>Though frankly speaking... It would be pretty much impossible...
>With this appearance, and at a girl's high school, after all, =>
>In a girl's high school with this appearance...

Because it's a girl's school and with my appearance...

>--But, without thinking of anything, =>
>...But without a doubt,

But, as soon as I let slip my true self...

After showing them the plain me as I am, =>
and they see how I normally am,

>--We naturally =>
>We'd naturally

Separated. =>
Separate.

>P67
>Eh? This? =>
>Eh? This is...

(Please receive it.) =>
Please take it.

(It'd be wrong of me.) =>
I'd feel guilty.

>Ah, er! Y, yeah, bought by my mother! =>
>Ah, erm! Y, yeah, those were bought by my mother!

The original is better.

>Then, this, =>
>Then this plush toy,
>P68

Ah, it sure suits her after all- =>
Ah, it sure suits her.

>But, what is it I wonder- This murky feeling...? =>
>But what's with this murky feeling?
>P69
>Softly, =>
>She's soft
>With a sweet smell... =>
>And smells sweet...
>...Se-, Senpai...-

(original is fine fine)

>P70
>No...... I'm, happy. =>
>It's fine... I'm happy about it.

Original is good.

>...Ah... =>
>...Oh...
>(Optional edit)

Original is good.

>That's right, this girl, she's serious. =>
>Oh yea. This girl is serious about me isn't she?

That's right. This girl is serious about me.

>--She's, seeking me...? =>
>Isn't she yearning for me...?

She... wants me...?

>If you're gonna get involved,
>--the proper resolve, alright?
>-prepare your resolve, alright?

If you're gonna take it farther, be prepared to deal with what comes with it, alright?

>0071

s す..っ (inhale..-) => (here I think it's her hand)
slide

>It's settled, isn't it. That I want to be this girl's prince-- =>
>It's settled huh. I want to be this girl's prince.
>(Optional edit if the redrawing of the background is too taxing)

My heart's made up. I want to be this girl's prince.

>--It's painful =>
>Why is it so painfu-

Original is good.

>P72
>Even though, I'm being enveloped, in this gentle a scent--... =>
>Even though I'm being enveloped in this a gentle scent.

Even though I'm being enveloped in this gentle scent.

>Er...? This is...? =>
>Eto...? This place is...?
>(Optional edit)

Er...? Where am...?

>The infirmary. Seems like you overworked yourself, so you should rest awhile, is what sensei said. =>
>The infirmary. Seems like you overworked yourself, so you should rest a while, is what sensei said.
>Being together with me, you overdid it, right? =>
>Being together with me overworked you didn't it?

Being together with me, you pushed yourself to do it, right?

>Ah... =>
>Oh...
>(Optional)

Original is fine.

>P73

s がばっ (energetically) =>
jump

You haven't caused me much trouble--... =>
You didn't cause me trouble

>at... all, though... =>
>at
>all...
>(Rationale: I thought Momoka was saying it at my first glance)

No this is Senpai: じゃ / ない / けど.
Like you said is good though.

>If I don't properly- / --but--... =>
>Why am I...

I really wanted this... (make it one line)

>--It's pathetic, but, I have no idea what I should do. =>
>so pathetic? I don't even know what to do anymore!

Geez, I'm pathetic. But I just don't know anymore.

Any further than this, I can't lie to myself, anymore--... =>
This can't go further. I can't lie to myself.

>I'm not able to become Momoko's prince... =>
>But I'm not able to become Momoko's prince anymore...

But I'm not able to become your prince anymore, Momoka...

>P74

...The truth about me is, I really love cute things. =>
...The truth is, I really love cute things.

Not matching my appearance in any way, I'm filled with thoughts about girly things. =>
It doesn't match my appearance at all, but it's all I think about.

>I thought that I could always stay by Momoko's side-... =>
>'So that I could always stay by Momoko's side...' was what I thought.

Original is good (I think you missed the 'if' in the previous sentence).

>That she would like me for my true self, I don't have any confidence. =>
>I didn't have any confidence that she would like me for my true self.
>(Optional edit)

That change is good.

>--But, pushing myself too far, the result was this collapse. =>
>But I have pushed myself too far and collaspsed as a result.

But, by pushing myself, I collapsed as a result.

--The truth is, this is really senpai's beloved, personal doll, isn't it? =>
So that means, this is really senpai's beloved, personal doll, isn't it?

>That regarding senpai, I like everything. =>
>That I liked everything about senpai.
>--That's why, from the start, I knew it. =>
>That's why I'd already knew...

(the だから can practically be ignored here)
I already knew from the start...

>That senpai was a girl who liked cute things. =>
>That senpai was a girl who liked cute things from the start.

Original is good.

>Eh...-? =>
>Wha-...?
>(Optional)
>Eh-- =>
>Whaaaat?
>(Optional)
>P75
>The senpai as you are right now, =>
>As the senpai as you are right now...

As you are right now...

>your cute points, properly, show them to me-- =>
>Please show me all your cute points properly!

I want to know all your cute points, senpai!

--We just happen to be in the infirmary too. =>
And how convenient we're in the infirmary.

>P76
>Because she's accepting my true self for myself =>
>On its own, my body is responding-

(no need to switch these around)
Because she's accepting my true self.

>On its own, my body is responding- =>
>Because she's accepting my true self.

On its own, my body is responding.

Page 77
please properly touch me--... =>
please touch me too...

Our smell is piling up on top of each other. =>
Our breaths are piling up on top of each other.

>P79
>Mo... Momoka...? You're okay? =>
>Mo... Momoka...? Are you okay with that?
>--As for me, At another time ♥ =>
>-As for me, How about next time (Insert heart-shaped character)

My turn can come... / next time ♥

>How to say it, like this..... For only me to...... =>
>How do I say it... it was only me who got...

...I / am fine. =>
For me... / this was enough.

Senpai, you wouldn't want to either, right? =>
Senpai still doesn't want to, right?

>P80

(You should properly come back to class.) =>
You should come back to class.

>--Somehow or another, =>
>Somehow or rather,
>(Optional, if redrawing is difficult)

Original is fine.

>In this way or that, this sweetie seems =>
>This sweetie seems...

To be much more skillful than I'd thought. =>
To be much more clever than I'd thought.

Your good-for-nothingness right there is cute, y'know? ♥ =>
For one, that frantic desperation is cute ♥

You said that out loud, just now ♥ =>
You asked it out loud, just now ♥



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