pg 1: "Haah...." lower pg 2: "Ah." tick lower pg 3: "...This is/terrible." or hyphenate "terrible". pg 4: "Mm..." lower pg 5: "So," lower pg 6: - "Hm?" tick left - Remove he two lines below "goes!" Put "Woah!/There it/goes!" horizontally somewhat between the two tripple-lines. - "[.]Aah-Aah." bit lower pg 7: - "...Good-/ness, you/idiot." - "That's right,", "It's quiet" and "Thought it'd be" bit smaller so it doesn't look as cramped. pg 8: - "Yet there's" lower - "well, I no longer" and "To the art" lower - Big tone gap around "I gave them" - "The room that was" lower pg 9: - "This place" tick lower - "Here," lower - "Phoo" lower - "Say, Okui" tick lower pg 10: - "Sigh..." left and lower - "With no chance" lower - "For now," tick lower - "That's fine" tick left" pg 11: - "After Satsuki's" lower - "I have a hot" tick lower - "Ooh?" lower - "She rarely" lower pg 12: - "One second." lower - "Senpai?" tick left and lower pg 13: - "Maybe," lower - Gap in the hair lines below the t of "the way" - "Eeeh?!" bit left - "No way!" larger and lower - "Okui", "I didn't expect" and "Aht's up" bit smaller so it doesn't look as cramped" - Redraw the gap in the bubble border - "Well..." lower - "Is that so?" bit lower - "She did it." lower pg 14: - "Sa-/tsuki?" or "Satsu-/ki?" - "Sat-/tsun," - "differ-/ent." pg 15: - "If only my love" lower - "I'd/have it/easier/now,/but..." - "You as well?", "That's quite cute", "Eiko-san." another font - "You're not making" lower pg 16: - "If it were" lower - "I wish it wasn't" tick higher - "Shii-..." tick lower - "But that this" lower - "With/your/heart." and lower