General: Remember that every sentence in English needs punctuation at the end, even if not every sentence in Japanese needs punctuation at the end. Transliterating sound effects from Japanese typically isn't enough to render them comprehensible to an Anglophone audience. Many sound effects (like ニコ or くる) have specific meanings that aren't communicated to an English-speaker just by being transliterated. Even Yen Press, the only English-language manga publisher I know of that includes transliterations of sound effects, includes translations alongside them. When a character pauses or is interrupted, use an emdash (—) instead of a hyphen (-) or two hyphens (--). If the emdash looks ugly in your chosen typeface, set the width of the hyphen character to 200%. As a rule, it's good practice to switch fonts in translation where the original switches fonts. 1.png White sand beach, white parasol, white dress -> white sand on the beach, white parason, white dress Seeking for an encounter -> Seeking an encounter Congratulations on your entering, Suzu. -> Congratulations on getting into your school of choice, Suzu. I had banned it until now, but -> I had forbidden it until now, but The ban to have a lover -> The ban on having a lover— 2.png I grep up in the greenhouse of the dorm of my elementary school Konaka girls' school... -> In elementary and middle school, I grew up sheltered in the dorms of a girls' school (小中 is read "しょうちゅう," and represents elementary scool 「小」学校 and middle school 「中」学校. 温室育ち is a metaphor with a meaning that's commonly understood in Japanese, but not in English; in direct translation, it sounds like she actually grew up living in a botanical conservatory.) From this spring I decided to go to a high school near my house -> I decided to go to a high school near my house starting this Spring. ゴソ Rustle ふぁさっ flop I've studied/from/my sister's/mangas... -> I've studied/from my/sister's manga... (avoid orphan "from") Sometimes, love may sprout by picking up lost things -> Sometimes, love may sprout by picking up lost things. (add period) And after this, I just need to wait a little further to get it picked up. -> And after this, I just need to wait a little longer for it to get picked up. 3.png ピタッ stop No one is returning them? -> No one is returning it? (Because she thinks she dropped a handkerchief, which is singular, the verb should be in the singular.) どき どき bdmp bdmp ワン ワン bark bark コラッ Hey! キャン whine ちょーん whump ごくっ gulp かああ~ flush ザリッ crunch If it's there, I... -> If he's there, I... ("it" is not used with humans, only with inhuman things. Because Suzu is expecting a human, it's appropriate to use "he" or "she." Because Suzu is expecting a man, "he" is proably the most appropriate here.) 4.png びく jolt くるっ whrl ぶわっ fwoop ぽ~っ gaze 5.png ぺこっ bow I'm glad-no, this instead -> I'm glad—but this comes fist. ギュッ squeeze ぽ~っ gaze ハッ gasp はううっ hnnnng ぎゅっ… squeeze 6.png Sister Mihaya-- -> Mihaya-onee-sama— (In English, the only people who are addressed as "Sister " are nuns. In translations, such as this one, that preserve honorifics in English, "nee-san," "nee-sama," and so on are genearlly treated as honorifics, and left unchanged.) Though I started laughing so much from the very beginning! -> But really, Suzu, you've always been such a laughingstock! No way, if my... underwear were to be picked up, it would be too much... -> I never would have expected that you might walk off with my...underwear... ひら ひら shake shake Yoriko, that won't happen to you. -> You don't have to cover for her, Yoriko. 7.png You know, when I'm home I'm in charge of the laundry, unlike in the dormitory, where I leave it to Yoriko. -> At any rate, you can't leave your laundry for Yoriko. We're not at the dorms—when you're home, we take turns, okay? めっ tut moji -> fidget Haa, well, it's like this the first time. -> Haa, well, this is how it goes at first. I've taken care of you restricting a lot of things. -> I've treated you so preciously growing up that I've set a lot of limits for you. I didn't even say the meaning of saying to find a lover. -> It's not like I meant to say that you should go out and pick a lover right away. You can go slowly to try to find it. -> You can take your time looking. biku -> twitch バッ bam 8.png すとん flop Are you sure you're not misunderstanding love for the excitement of being embarrassed? -> Are you sure you're not confusing the thrill of embarrassment for love? ドン! slap I was already excited before I realized that the pants were dropped. -> I was already excited before I realized that what I'd dropped was panties. ぽぽぽっ bat bat bat ドキ ドキ b-dmp b-dmp Even now,/just/remembe-/ring it... -> Even now,/just remember-/ing it... (if you have to hyphenate a word ending in -ing, it's typically best to break it just before that "ing." Also, avoid the orphan "just.") どよーん deject Even though I thought Suzu was still a child, for just a random guy -> I didn't think you were the sort of girl to be carried off by some guy cruising the area to pick up chicks Being kind, like in a manga, making you fall in love with him... -> But to fall for him just because he bumped into you and showed a bit of kindness... ガバッ glomp My Suzu is in her rebellious period! -> My Suzu is in a rebellious phase! 9.png ニヤリ grin kyu kyu -> kya kya うり うり rub rub It's good. I like this development. -> That's good. I like this development. Mihaya's true nature has born, Suzu-chan. -> Well, you were born to Mihaya's flesh-and-blood sister, Suzu. 10.png Yoriko! You have to call me president now! -> Yoriko! You have to call me "president" now! (add quotation marks) キ glare Even if you're my longtime friend and recently became my lover, please switch it! -> You recently went from being my longtime friend to being my lover, so make the switch like I know you can! bishi -> fwip I told you to keep it a secret... -> We said we'd keep it a secret... うぷぷっ heh heh heh I was both happy and hurt. -> I was just so happy I let it slip. niko niko -> all smiles I'm so happy that someone I like so much, as Yoriko-san, managed to become my sister! -> I'm so happy that someone I like as much as you, Yoriko-san, managed to become my sister! 11.png kaaaaa -> flush Anyway, I take care of both of you, so you two already look like sister. -> Anyway, I take care of both of you, so you two are basically sisters. くす くす giggle わー わー Heeey! Hoooo! ほうっ… sigh... I wish we will be able to meet again. -> I hope we will be able to meet again. I'm already investigating about the panty-girl. -> I'm already investigating the panty-girl. ワク ワク excitement President, I think I know the name. -> President, I don't think that's a good naming convention. 12.png I'm glad you managed to get Suzu's trail go ahead. -> I'm gald we had someone tailing Suzu. I would not let a strange person to touch the niece I rased for so long. -> I wouldn't let some wierdo touch the niece I'e been raising for so long. 遠目じか女の子と分からなったみたいだけど Doesn't seem like you could tell she was a girl from a distance, though. きゃっ kya ガタッ scoot Ah, about the panty-girl, xx-chan's report just arrived. -> Ah, the report on panty-girl...chan has arrived. ポッ blip カチ カチ tak tak Hmmm...She surely got a nice face. -> Hmmm...She sure has a nice face. 女子中等学校 卒業 Graduated from a girls' middle school んーっ mmmm 13.png ぱちっ wink Make sure you enter in some club. -> Make sure you join a club. Since then I have been to the see several times, but -> Since then, I've been to the sea several times, but She shouldn't chane that much for her age. -> She shouldn't change that much at her age. 14.png ばっ whup タッ タッ tok tok You're the one from last month at the see!! -> You're the one from last month at the sea!! 15.png バッ whap かぁぁっ flush ギョッ twist はあ はあ pant pant だだだ clop clop clop ガッ wrench ドサッ fwump hurts... -> that hurts... 16.png ドキ ドキ ドキ bdmp bdmp bdmp はっ gasp If it's ok, may I do it for you? -> Let me please do it to make it up to you! Dropping something like pantys. -> Yeah, you dropped some spectacular panties. Ah, that's right, the pantys... -> Ah, that's right, the panties... It doesn't matter if that was the start! -> That wasn't the right choice to kick things off, was it? 17.png これが編み込み! This is a French braid! えへへ heh heh Doing something like this is almost impossible. -> You must have had to work harder than it's worth, huh? どきっ bdmp That's not true, -> That's not true! ぐっ clench クスッ chuckle 18.png Ahhhh, I'm losing my role as an ant. -> Ahhhh, being an aunt just isn't worth it. Mi...President! It's you that almost fell in love with Suzu-chan. -> Mi...President! You were the one that spurred Suzu-chan's love on. Even so, -> More importantly, ムッ grr モニュ モニュ smoosh squoosh はぁ… sigh... Yuzu is so similar to her sister. -> Yuzu is so similar to my sister. You're saying this, but isn't that a lie? -> I would say you're just not being honest with yourself. ごそっ rustle 19.png たぷっ plush くにくに tweak びくんっ jolt はぁ gasp きゃっ kya ぴく twitch はっ Hah ピクン twitch ぐにっ grope ちゅっ smack くちゅー slurp んっ mmm はーっ haaaaah スリスリ slide スルッ 20.png I don't want to be Suzu's substitute. -> I don't want Suzu to be my sister's second coming. ぬりゆっ moisten クチュ クチュ schlick schlick トロッ drip びくっ twitch はっ hah ぴくっ jerk くちゅ schlup ぬるっ splip くぷっ om ぬちゅ schlick くちゅ schlup スッ shff Suzu-chan is really important for you, isn't she. -> Suzu-chan is really important to you, isn't she? 21.png I really loved her, she's my sister's daughter after all... -> She's my beloved sister's daughter, after all... びくっ twitch ぬちっ schlick ぎゅっ clasp ギシッ creak ぬちゅっ schlick ピクッ jerk くり くりっ tweak tweak びくん shudder ひあっ Oh! ちゅううっ slurp ピクン jolt ぐりっ twist ぐちっ schlup ガクッ shake ふー huff グシャッ crinkle チュッ smooch Don't do that yet. -> We haven't filed this one yet—! ぐしゃー crinkle ばっ whp 22.png ムムーッ come on ちょっ… Hold... Yoriko, come on, look at me, why are you defending yourself? -> Yoriko, come on, look at me. Why are you turning away? ぐい yank ひーっ eeek スッ whp How would it be like this? -> Oh, that'll be fine one way or another. かっ.. blush ぐいっ yank ぬぷっ schlöp ぐちゅ schlick ふあ fuah ずぷっ schlip ぐぷっ schlup ぐちゅ schlick いゃぷ plup ぎゃうっ gya-huh ピクッ twitch ぷあっ huff ぬちゅ schlick ぐち schlup ぐちゅ schlup ギシッ creak 23.png ビク jolt ぬぷっ plup かあぁ flush ニッ smirk びくっ shudder あっ Ah! ヌチュ schlick グチュ schlup ぐちゅ schlick ずにゅぃ grind びくっ twitch ずぷっ schlörp グリ smush ヌチュ schlup ビクッ shudder きゅぅっ wring ぴくっ jerk ぶるっ shiver